You really conveyed the urgency in both John and Rodney and kept the hotness going at the same time and that's not so easy to do
I spent more time fiddling with the pacing of this thing than with anything else. Well, okay, I might have spent some time just smiling as I imagined them blundering their way through a first date that wasn't.
Rodney wanting to watch John was just...and the way he kept talking -- just
When aithine asked for voyeurism, I almost panicked. I have a love of dialogue that is legendary, and watching doesn't often include talking. Thank God Rodney never shuts up. *g*
So, now that I have subjected you to my writery thoughts, let me just say thanks again. Glad you liked it.
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You really conveyed the urgency in both John and Rodney and kept the hotness going at the same time and that's not so easy to do
I spent more time fiddling with the pacing of this thing than with anything else. Well, okay, I might have spent some time just smiling as I imagined them blundering their way through a first date that wasn't.
Rodney wanting to watch John was just...and the way he kept talking -- just
When
So, now that I have subjected you to my writery thoughts, let me just say thanks again. Glad you liked it.